2024年3月24日发(作者：单于晗)
【文本再现】
As an enthusiastic climber, I would make an annual trip to the peak of Mount of the
Holy year, my new partner Merle a young and athletic dog,climbed with
me. I hadn’t thought twice about taking Merle; actually,I expected him to beat me to
the peak.
Before setting off,I filled my backpack with bottled water, dry food,and-a can of
beef. Having put the collar(颈圈)-with his name and my phone number on Merle, I
started my big adventure with him. Several hours later, while we were rushing
towards the peak, Merle still seemed energetic and I also felt energized by the clear
mountain air.
When reaching the peak, I heard a short bark and thought Merle would be seconds
behind me. He was incredibly close to me and always followed me.I took a photo of
the view, called out to Merle, and headed back down the path. However, Merle was
nowhere to be seen.
“Merle! Merle!”I called. “Where are you?” I felt panic rising within me, as there was
no sign of him.
Then I saw something moving in the basin below. It was Merle! After nearly an hour,
I made it to the basin and saw Merle standing on a large rock. A feeling of relief
washed over me. Soon, I was close enough to see that his legs were badly injured.
When I was within a few feet of him, he dived into a crack(缝隙) at the edge of rocks.
I immediately struggled to clear snow and rocks but could only stick my head in the
crack. Seeing nothing in the darkness, I just heard the jingle of Merle’s collar. I yelled.
No response. Then I went to the scene of the fall and saw the path Merle had taken.
He’d slid about 700 feet down the upper snowfield, fallen off a 40-foot cliff(峭
壁),and then rolled down another 100-foot cliff to the lower snowfield. “Merle may
be on the edge of death,”I said to myself.
Paragraph 1: I returned to the crack and called Merle again.
Paragraph 2: Three weeks later, I received a call claiming to have found Merle.
【文本解析】
本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和他的狗Merle一起爬山，Merle不幸掉进岩石
的缝隙中,作者施救未果,三周后却意外找回 Merle的故事。
第1段交代了故事发生的背景，即作者期望和新伙伴Merle一起爬圣十字山;第
2-5段为故事的发展阶段:作者发现 Merle 不见后努力找寻，最后发现他掉进了
岩石的缝隙中且受伤严重;第6段是故事的高潮部分，主要描述了作者施救Merle
的过程。
文章运用了大量的动作描写、心理描写和环境描写来塑造人物形象和描述Merle
遇到的险境。
各种细节描写：
动作描写（filled my backpack with,put the collar……;rushing towards the
peak;headed back;dived into; struggled to clear snow and rocks;stick my
head in the crack;yelled;slid; fallen off;rolled down)
心理描写：（feel energetic; felt panic rising inside me ;a feeling of relief
rushed over me)
环境描写：（clear mountain;basin below;a large rock; 700 feet down the
upper snowfield; a 40-foot cliff;another 100-foot cliff;the lower
snowfield)
【思路分析】
根据前文最后一段及续写第一段提示语可知，作者查明Merle遇险的经过后，又
回到了缝隙处，即Merle现在待的地方。那接下来会发生什么呢?Merle的情况如
何?作者的心理活动是怎样的?他会采取什么办法救Merle 呢?
续写第二段提示语提到三周后，作者接到声称找到了 Merle 的电话。由此可推断，
作者那天未能成功救出Merle，所以在续写第一段时需涵盖此内容以保证故事情
节的连贯性及逻辑性。续写第二段时应展开合理想象描述作者接到电话后的一系
列行为和心理活动。此外,前文提到 Merle 很亲近作者，所以续写时可涉及Merle
获救后和作者重逢时的亲昵表现。
【下水作文】
I returned to the crack and called Merle again. Still no response. I opened the can
of beef and left it at the mouth of the crack to attract Merle, but in vain. I spent
another hour crouching outside until the jingle of the collar stopped. At that moment,I
thought Merle might have died, so I blamed myself for that. If only I hadn’t taken
Merle with me! After a while the sun was setting, and I had to leave the crack and
go home.
Three weeks later, I received a call claiming to have
found Merle. Though I
couldn’t believe my ears,I immediately rushed into my car to pick him
I heard the familiar bark, I knew my “lost”friend was back. Upon seeing him, I
gently touched his skinny body. He wagged his tail and licked my the next
week, Merle recovered well. I now firmly believe there is a close bond between
Merle and me.
【续写感悟】
读后续写材料中通常会运用大量的肖像、心理、动作、环境等细节描写来刻画人
物的鲜明形象，呈现人物的内心情感变化，交代故事的背景和渲染气氛，从而推
动情节的发展。
细节，才是王道。
2024年3月24日发(作者：单于晗)
【文本再现】
As an enthusiastic climber, I would make an annual trip to the peak of Mount of the
Holy year, my new partner Merle a young and athletic dog,climbed with
me. I hadn’t thought twice about taking Merle; actually,I expected him to beat me to
the peak.
Before setting off,I filled my backpack with bottled water, dry food,and-a can of
beef. Having put the collar(颈圈)-with his name and my phone number on Merle, I
started my big adventure with him. Several hours later, while we were rushing
towards the peak, Merle still seemed energetic and I also felt energized by the clear
mountain air.
When reaching the peak, I heard a short bark and thought Merle would be seconds
behind me. He was incredibly close to me and always followed me.I took a photo of
the view, called out to Merle, and headed back down the path. However, Merle was
nowhere to be seen.
“Merle! Merle!”I called. “Where are you?” I felt panic rising within me, as there was
no sign of him.
Then I saw something moving in the basin below. It was Merle! After nearly an hour,
I made it to the basin and saw Merle standing on a large rock. A feeling of relief
washed over me. Soon, I was close enough to see that his legs were badly injured.
When I was within a few feet of him, he dived into a crack(缝隙) at the edge of rocks.
I immediately struggled to clear snow and rocks but could only stick my head in the
crack. Seeing nothing in the darkness, I just heard the jingle of Merle’s collar. I yelled.
No response. Then I went to the scene of the fall and saw the path Merle had taken.
He’d slid about 700 feet down the upper snowfield, fallen off a 40-foot cliff(峭
壁),and then rolled down another 100-foot cliff to the lower snowfield. “Merle may
be on the edge of death,”I said to myself.
Paragraph 1: I returned to the crack and called Merle again.
Paragraph 2: Three weeks later, I received a call claiming to have found Merle.
【文本解析】
本文是一篇记叙文，讲述了作者和他的狗Merle一起爬山，Merle不幸掉进岩石
的缝隙中,作者施救未果,三周后却意外找回 Merle的故事。
第1段交代了故事发生的背景，即作者期望和新伙伴Merle一起爬圣十字山;第
2-5段为故事的发展阶段:作者发现 Merle 不见后努力找寻，最后发现他掉进了
岩石的缝隙中且受伤严重;第6段是故事的高潮部分，主要描述了作者施救Merle
的过程。
文章运用了大量的动作描写、心理描写和环境描写来塑造人物形象和描述Merle
遇到的险境。
各种细节描写：
动作描写（filled my backpack with,put the collar……;rushing towards the
peak;headed back;dived into; struggled to clear snow and rocks;stick my
head in the crack;yelled;slid; fallen off;rolled down)
心理描写：（feel energetic; felt panic rising inside me ;a feeling of relief
rushed over me)
环境描写：（clear mountain;basin below;a large rock; 700 feet down the
upper snowfield; a 40-foot cliff;another 100-foot cliff;the lower
snowfield)
【思路分析】
根据前文最后一段及续写第一段提示语可知，作者查明Merle遇险的经过后，又
回到了缝隙处，即Merle现在待的地方。那接下来会发生什么呢?Merle的情况如
何?作者的心理活动是怎样的?他会采取什么办法救Merle 呢?
续写第二段提示语提到三周后，作者接到声称找到了 Merle 的电话。由此可推断，
作者那天未能成功救出Merle，所以在续写第一段时需涵盖此内容以保证故事情
节的连贯性及逻辑性。续写第二段时应展开合理想象描述作者接到电话后的一系
列行为和心理活动。此外,前文提到 Merle 很亲近作者，所以续写时可涉及Merle
获救后和作者重逢时的亲昵表现。
【下水作文】
I returned to the crack and called Merle again. Still no response. I opened the can
of beef and left it at the mouth of the crack to attract Merle, but in vain. I spent
another hour crouching outside until the jingle of the collar stopped. At that moment,I
thought Merle might have died, so I blamed myself for that. If only I hadn’t taken
Merle with me! After a while the sun was setting, and I had to leave the crack and
go home.
Three weeks later, I received a call claiming to have
found Merle. Though I
couldn’t believe my ears,I immediately rushed into my car to pick him
I heard the familiar bark, I knew my “lost”friend was back. Upon seeing him, I
gently touched his skinny body. He wagged his tail and licked my the next
week, Merle recovered well. I now firmly believe there is a close bond between
Merle and me.
【续写感悟】
读后续写材料中通常会运用大量的肖像、心理、动作、环境等细节描写来刻画人
物的鲜明形象，呈现人物的内心情感变化，交代故事的背景和渲染气氛，从而推
动情节的发展。
细节，才是王道。